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Undyne NSFW WIP

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Because yes.
She seems hungry, someone should give her some D E T E R M I N A T I O N
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5000x6000px 1.95 MB
Mature
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

I absolutely love the flow in this piece. The way her hair, arms legs and body all point my eye towards her head means this piece has great composition.

What you could improve (This is me just being nit picky)

1. Her positioning in the piece makes it seem like she is crowded towards the upper left of the piece. The hair touching the edges, and the amount of space beneath her visually pulls her off the page. I wouldn't suggest centering her or anything, but separate the hair from the edge of the page to reduce this effect.

2. Her vagina probably wouldn't be visible from this angle. I'm still working on my anatomy, so take this with a grain of salt, but it kind of feels like you added it in way too far back from where it normally is. I can definitely say that her anus would be showing, but I don't think I would see her vagina from this angle.

3. Her boobs are a bit off. Both of the nipples are pointing at the exact same angle. With the angle of her upper body her right nipple should be more angled towards the viewer, not by a lot though. I also feel as if you had trouble deciding between just having one breast showing, as a side boob, or having both breasts showing. This kind of make the left breast look out of place. Her shoulder and collar bone work with the right breast, but the left breast in relation to them seems to unnaturally jut out further from her body. My solution to this is to either turn the upper body more so you're probably seeing the left collar bone and shoulder, or to move the left breast slightly closer to the body.

4. Her body overlapping looks a little weird in some instances. First off I'd like to see her left arm. I know you're obscuring it with her body, but not having an elbow or part of the arm showing messes with me a bit. I'd suggest placing her left hand on her left knee to fix this, if you want to that is. Also her hair seems to visually be cut by her body. I'm guessing you drew the two parts separately when you were roughing out this piece. Try drawing hair as one object when you rough out a piece especially if it is being overlapped, it should look a little more natural that way. Also the edge of the hair is lining up with the curve from her collar bone to her breast which visually separates it from the hair on the other side of her body.

5. To color or not to color that is the question. I like the red of her hair in this piece as it is an eye catching element, but it kind of makes the rest of the piece ever so slightly blander because of this. I would like to see her body colored as well, but I understand if you are trying to stick with the aesthetic of the game's black and white sprites. Also having highlights on her body but not in her hair has makes the hair ever so slightly blander.

This was me getting rather nit picky as this is still an amazing piece, but I hope some of the advice I had helps you on future work.